写作最为忌讳的就是跑题二字,但凡是你围绕主题写那么点也不至于落得个扣除基本分的下场。青岛新航道专注于青岛雅思培训,和大家一起分析一下个中缘由。由于很多同学的思维比较发散,很容易把雅思文章也写得九曲十八弯,没了方向,最后难免落得个跑题的命运——意味着雅思的作文被人减了2-3分。实在可惜!
而当跑题已经成为习惯,当不知不觉想到别的成为自然,需要一种方法——重复关键词,把发散的思维拉回来。
在分析范文之前,我们先做一个思维练习:
Recently some people in the United Kingdom decided to eliminate television sets from their homes. They believe that, by doing this, their children will spend the leisure time more creatively. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the decision? |
如果要写这篇文章,你会写什么?请先一定自己思考一下。
大部分人会写不在家里安装电视的好处和坏处。不少考生会写,不在家里安装电视,孩子们会把精力放在学习上。——问题往往出现在会把精力放在学习上这一点上,因为考官本题的问题是:在多大程度上你同意还是不同意这个决定。
那么决定是什么?不在家里安装电视。
为什么不在家里安装电视?题目中说:他们认为,这样孩子们就会更加有创造性地度过休闲时光。而“创造性”是这个决定的出发点,也是这篇文章的关键词。所有的观点都应该为“创造性”而展开。否则,提到“会把精力放在学习上”,就属于跑题了。因为它跟关键词“创造性”没有直接的关系。
试想一下,如果拿到题目,找到关键词,不断地围绕关键词,是不是就可以实现永远不跑题了?
因此,我推荐下面这篇范文,它把“重复关键词”这种方法用到了。
请看一下这篇文章的题目:
Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age? |
题目中的关键词是: 孩子的年龄 上学 好处 |
请看这篇文章,有多少次提到孩子年龄,又有多少次提到上学。
(本文来自剑4 Test B P173)
In many places today, children start primary school at around the age of six or seven. However, because it is more likely now that both parents work, there is little opportunity for children to stay in their own home up to that age. Instead, they will probably go to a nursery school when they are much younger.
While some people think this may be damaging to a child’s development, or to a child’s relationship with his or her parents, in fact there are many advantages to having school experience at a young age.
Firstly, a child will learn to interact with a lot of different people and some children learn to communicate very early because of this. They are generally more confident and independent than children who stay at home with their parents and who are not used to strangers or new situations. Such children find their first day at school at the age of six very frightening and this may have a negative effect on how they learn.
Another advantage of going to school at an early age is that children develop faster socially. They make friends and learn how to get on with other children of a similar age. This is often not possible at home because they are the only child, or because their brothers or sisters are older or younger.
So overall, I believe that, attending school from a young age is good for most children. They still spend plenty of time at home with their parents, so they can benefit from both environments. |
如今,很多地方的小孩大概6、7岁开始上小学。但是,因为现在父母双方都工作的可能性越来越大,小孩很少有机会能一直在自己家里待到这个年龄。他们可能很小就到托儿所去了。
虽然有人认为这样会对孩子的发展或孩子与父母的关系造成伤害,但其实早入学的体验好处很多。
首先,孩子会学会和很多不同的人打交道,有的孩子因此很早就学会了沟通。通常,他们比那些和父母一起待在家里、不习惯陌生人或新环境的孩子更加自信和独立。那些孩子到了6岁发现上学天非常可怕,这可能对他们的学习产生负面影响。
早上学的另一个好处是孩子在社交方面发展更快。他们结交朋友,学会如何与年纪相仿的孩子相处。这在家里是不可能做到的,因为他们是独生子女,或者因为他们的兄弟姐妹要么比他们大,要么比他们小。
因此,总的来说,我相信早上学对大多数孩子来说是有好处的。他们也有足够的时间和父母一起在家里,所以他们可以从两种环境中受益。
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总结一下,在上文中:
表示“年龄”:
1. at around the age of six or seven
2. up to that age
3. when they are much younger
4. at the age of six
5. at an early age
6. of a similar age
7. are older or younger
表示“上学”:
1. start primary school
2. go to a nursery school
3. having school experience
4. first day at school
5. attending school
表示“好处”:
1. many advantages
2. more confident and independent
3. develop faster socially
4. is good for
5. benefit from
通过这篇范文,我们不难得出结论:不断的重复关键词,就会把文章用主线穿好;不断的重复关键词,就会把主题一次次深化。
词汇储备
nursery school |
幼儿园 |
be damaging to |
对…有害 |
at a young age |
在小时候 |
interact |
v. 互动 |
the only child |
独生子女 |
have a negative effect on |
有负面影响 |
最后说一说如何准备雅思写作。很多跑题是由于考生不知从何下笔,匆匆拼凑观点而导致的。解决这一问题的关键在于练习。只有平时有存货,考试才能有内容,有内容就不容易跑题。在准备时,除了注意素材,也要注意方法。
雅思写作的快速提高方式是仿写的范文。很多学习都是从模仿开始的,在模仿中,你可以吸取他人的精华,弥补自己的短板。但是,仿写雅思作文,要注意选择合适的材料,并不是所有的范文都是好范文,一定要选择正式出版物中的文章,网络上的文章水平参差不齐,考生无法甄别,不建议使用。第二是要注意选择合适的范文,一些范文大秀英文水平,使用了大量复杂句和词汇,很难理解,谈何吸收?其实很多这一类的文章语法和词汇虽好,但不一定切题,本末倒置。所以,考生考都看不懂的文章尽量不要模仿,要模仿主题和结构清晰,语法和词汇简单够用的范文。第三,不要把范文照搬到试卷上。
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