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专栏作者：唐伟胜
新航道特约雅思学术顾问
广东外语外贸大学教授、博士
中国知名英语教育专家
《9分达人雅思写作真题还原及解析3》作者
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2018年04月26日
雅思大作文题目

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In some countries, many people choose to educate their children at home by themselves instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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解析&审题

本次作文是2016年2月13日的原题重现。教育类话题本来是雅思写作考试的重点，但在2018年出现的次数竟然寥寥，因此接下来大家还是要更重视这个话题。唐老师编写的《9分达人雅思写作真题还原及解析3》108-111页有本题原题高分范文!

本题是教育类老题目。问题的核心是“孩子在家接受教育好，还是到学校接受教育好”。

这个话题大家一定有很多话可说。比如，在家接受教育，父母能更了解自己的孩子，父母和孩子之间可以建立更加深厚的感情，孩子接受外面环境坏影响的可能性更低等；但是另外一方面，在家接受教育也使孩子学不会与人相处的基本能力，这对孩子的未来又很不利。老雅建议本题采用双面讨论模式，最后提出：家庭教育固然重要，但还是让孩子接受学校教育，因为孩子终究要离开父母，走入社会。

 

老师笔记

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Contrary to the conventional practice of sending their kids to school, more and more parents today choose to educate their children themselves at home. While this "home-education" model may be beneficial in some ways, home can never replace school as the major place for the education of kids.

与将孩子送到学校这一传统做法相反的是，越来越多的父母现在选择自己在家教育孩子。虽然这种“家庭教育”的模式在某些方面也许有好处，但是，学校才是孩子教育的主要场所，家庭永远也取代不了。

解析
（1）开头段，先引出话题（越来越多的父母选择在家教育自己的孩子），然后提出自己的观点（家庭无法替代学校的地位）。
（2）“Contrary to the conventional practice of…” 相当于 “Different from the conventional practice of…” 本句也可以写成 “Instead of the conventional practice of …”
（3）While 引导一个转折句，在这句中相当于although。用while，转折语气没有那么浓烈，读起来更加自然。是个加分的小词！

02

Admittedly, home-education can bring about a bunch of benefits. With only one kid to teach, the parents will be able to know completely about the problems the kid has. In contrast, the teachers in school cannot spend that much time on the same kid because they have dozens of others to take care of. The natural result of this is that the home-educated kid may be given full attention to while his counterparts in school may well be ignored by his teachers. It is, therefore, very possible that a kid receiving home education excels a kid in school in terms of test scores.

的确，家庭教育可以带来一些好处。因为只教一个孩子，父母就能全部了解孩子的问题所在。然而，学校的老师不可能在一个孩子身上花那么多时间，因为他们得照顾其他几十个孩子。这种情况的自然结果是，在家接受教育的孩子可以得到全部关照，而他在学校读书的伙伴则完全可能被老师所忽视。因此，在家接受教育的孩子很可能在考试分数上要优于学校的孩子。

解析
（1）本段论述家庭教育的好处。其思维逻辑是这样的：孩子在家接受教育，父母会知道他所有的问题 – 而学校的老师不可能把所有事件都花在一个孩子身上 – 结果，在家受教育的孩子会得到全部关注，而学校的孩子可能被老师忽视 –因此，接受家庭教育的孩子考试成绩可能会更好。
（2）admittedly，相当于汉语中的“的确”。一般前面使用admittedly，后面要跟上however, nevertheless之类的词，构成“的确，……，但是，……”这样的逻辑搭配。
（3）in contrast, 或者 by contrast，表示“与此相对照的是……”
（4）counterpart 可以对应的人或物。在本句中，the home-educated kid 指在家受教育的孩子，在学校接受教育的孩子就是这些孩子在学校的对应物（counterpart）。这是个很逼格蛮高的词汇，如果不用它，本句就得写成The natural result of this is that the home-educated kid may be given full attention to while those kids in school may well be ignored by his teachers.
（5） excel是动词，表示“超越”，“比谁做得好”。大家熟悉excel表格，可能不知道excel原本是动词的。其实，我们还很熟悉这个词的形容词，那就是excellent！

03

Nevertheless, test score is not the only objective of education. As far as I understand, education is more about telling a kid to become a better person and the first step towards this aim is learning to get along with people. In this regard, home-education can do very little. However, when the kid is sent to school, he will learn how to work out a problem in cooperation with his peer classmates and in this process, he will understand the art of cooperation and leadership. A home-educated kid, however well he achieves in tests, is just like a flower in greenhouse which easily withers away when exposed to the rain outside.

然而，考试分数不是教育的目标。在我看来，教育更重要的是教会孩子成为一个更好的人，而实现这一目标的步就是学会如何与人相处。这一方面，家庭教育几乎无能为力。但是，如果把孩子送到学校，他就能学会如何与同伴同学合作解决一个问题，在这个过程中，他会明白合作和领导的艺术。接受家庭教育的孩子，无论他的考试分数多高，都不过像温室花朵，一旦遭遇外面的风雨，很容易就凋谢。

解析
（1）本段论述学校教育的好处。从教育的目的出发，即教育不仅是为了考试得高分，还是教会学生做一个好人，然后论证学校在教会学生合作精神和领导才能方面比家庭优势更大。
（2）in this regard  在这一方面
（3）黑体字这个高逼格的句型，你能写吗？若一定要写，就不要写错哦！如果没有信心，就老老实实地写：No matter how well a home-educated kid achieves in tests, he is just like a flower in greenhouse and he easily withers away when he is exposed to the rain outside. 

04

Unlike many worried parents who prefer to educate their kids at home, I believe school is the best place for kids' education. While there may be some bad influences outside home, there are also many excellent people who could be role models for kids. Most important of all, it is just in not so pure a place as school that kids can learn to tell right from wrong, good from bad and eventually become aphysically and psychologically sound person when they grow up. 

与那些忧心忡忡宁愿在家教育孩子的父母不同，我相信学校才是教育孩子的地方。虽然家庭外也许存在一些坏的影响，但也有很多的人，可以成为孩子的榜样。最重要的是，正是在像学校这样不纯的地方，孩子们能够学会分辨正误和是非，待他们长大之后，最终成为身心健康的人。

解析
（1）unlike放在句首，引出自己反对的做法或观点
（2）role model 就是我们经常说的“榜样”。比如，Parents are the first role model for their kids.
（3）eventually 相当于“到最后，终于”，看起来好像比finally要更准确一点，高大上一点。
（4）physically and psychologically healthy 就是我们天天念叨的“身心健康”。

 

本场考试范文

Contrary to the conventional practice of sending their kids to school, more and more parents today choose to educate their children themselves at home. While this "home-education" model may be beneficial in some ways, home can never replace school as the major place for the education of kids.

Admittedly, home-education can bring about a bunch of benefits. With only one kid to teach, the parents will be able to know completely about the problems the kid has. In contrast, the teachers in school cannot spend that much time on the same kid because they have dozens of others to take care of. The natural result of this is that the home-educated kid may be given full attention to while his counterparts in school may well be ignored by his teachers. It is, therefore, very possible that a kid receiving home education excels a kid in school in terms of test scores.

Nevertheless, test score is not the only objective of education. As far as I understand, education is more about telling a kid to become a better person and the first step towards this aim is learning to get along with people. In this regard, home-education can do very little. However, when the kid is sent to school, he will learn how to work out a problem in cooperation with his peer classmates and in this process, he will understand the art of cooperation and leadership. A home-educated kid, however well he achieves in tests, is just like a flower in greenhouse which easily withers away when exposed to the rain outside.

Unlike many worried parents who prefer to educate their kids at home, I believe school is the best place for kids' education. While there may be some bad influences outside home, there are also many excellent people who could be role models for kids. Most important of all, it is just in not so pure a place as school that kids can learn to tell right from wrong, good from bad and eventually become physically and psychologically healthy when they grow up.

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