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12月10日雅思写作大作文解析

作者: 2016-12-13 14:51 来源:青岛编辑

 

 

  2016年12月10日雅思大作文题目

  Some people think they have right to use as much fresh water as they want, but others believe government should control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

  2016年12月10日的雅思大作文又翻版了2013年9月28日的原题。

 

  关于淡水使用,关于自然资源,这类话题虽然不常出现,但隔三差五地会出来显示自己的存在,因此,烤鸭也需要积累一定的相关素材和表达法。

  比较久远的如2010年4月10日的考题“飞机票便宜了,这是否对环境资源有消极的影响”,比较新近的如2015年8月1日的考题“自然资源消耗很快,你认为这是什么原因,如何解决?

  这些题目均与资源资源的消耗和保护有关。

  很多同学“两耳不闻窗外事,一心只读雅思书”,对社会问题一无所知,同时又缺乏必要的思维训练,结果是拿到题目大脑一片空白,无法深入地、有逻辑地去思考。比如本题,有人认为他们有权任意使用淡水(fresh water),这是什么原因呢?无非是他们认为自己有钱购买,有权享受,而且认为世界上淡水多到用不完。这看似简单的的三个原因,其实就是唐老师多次讲过的雅思写作思维中的三个层次:有钱购买是物质层次,有权享受是心理层次,水资源无穷无尽是社会层次。那么,怎么反驳这些人呢?

  我觉得,人家有钱购买,有权享受这两个理由基本上是无法反驳的,但是如果从社会层面上看,我们就会发现有很多反驳的理由。水资源是有限的,不是无穷无尽,随着人口的增多,工农业的发展,用水量越来越大,因此水资源问题会给人类的生存带来毁灭性后果。

  因此,我们的结论就是如果政府不限制淡水使用,终有一天到我们无法生存的时候,我们有再多的金钱,再多的权利,都是然并卵!

 

  7分范文

 

  We all, humans and non-humans alike, need fresh water for our survival. The issue is that a lot of people always try to make a case for their wasteful use of fresh water, arguing that they have money, and more importantly right to buy and use as much fresh water as they want. Their constant rhetoric is something like, “so what? Don’t worry, for we have enough fresh water! ”

  Well, that is certainly not true. Even though they are rich and have been empowered to use as much fresh water as they like, they should try their best to conserve fresh water, because fresh water, like other natural resources, are actually limited. As scientists have told us, though the Earth might have many bodies of water, the fresh water comprises less than 2% of the world’s total water volume, which is indeed a very small fraction. The remaining 98% is found in oceans, which is salt water and not suitable for our uses. Admittedly, the water cycle eventually returns water to Earth, yet it's not always returned to the same spot, or in the same quantity and quality. Failing to conserve water can eventually lead to a lack of an adequate, healthy water supply, which can have drastic consequences in rising costs, reduced food supplies, health hazards and political conflict.

  To combat the anthropocentric claim of the unlimited right to use fresh water, we have to remember that, besides human beings, other animals and plants also need fresh water for their survival and growth. To sustain the ever-increasing population, we have already consumed tremendous amount of fresh water in agricultural irrigation, industrial production and electricity generation, not including those we drink in our daily life. It is, therefore, completely necessary for us human beings to save fresh water for other beings in the universe, on whom our own existence largely depends.

  So, financially and civilly, people should be allowed the power to use the fresh water the way they like, but as the fresh water resource is rather limited and the it is so vital to the survival of both humans and non-humans, I think the government should take immediate actions to control the use of fresh water.

  (375 words)

 

  老师笔记

 

  01、We all, humans and non-humans alike, need fresh water for our survival. The issue is that a lot of people always try to make a case for their wasteful use of fresh water, arguing that they have money, and more importantly right to buy and use as much fresh water as they want. Their constantrhetoric is something like, “so what? Don’t worry, for we have enough fresh water! ”

  无论人类还是非人类都需要淡水才能生存。问题是,许多人经常为他们浪费淡水找借口,说他们有钱,更有权随心所欲地购买和使用淡水。他们的言辞经常是这样的:“那又怎么样?不要担心,淡水足够用!”

  解析

  (1) 本次作文,唐老师使用了一个不同以往的开头段。先提出话题,然后直接表明观点。文风也变得更加灵活,这里也给烤鸭提供了一种另类雅思作文的范例:雅思作文注重个性化,只要合适,没有什么不可以!

  (2) alike 同样的,两者都(这样的看似小词,你会用吗?)

  (3) survival 生存

  (4) make a case for... 为......找借口(地道表达)

  (5) rhetoric \ˈre-tə-rik\ 说辞,修辞

 

  02、Well, that is certainly not true. Even though they are rich and have been empowered to use as much fresh water as they like, they should try their best to conserve fresh water, because fresh water, like other natural resources, are actually limited. As scientists have told us, though the Earth might have many bodies of water, the fresh water comprises less than 2% of the world’s total water volume, which is indeed a very small fraction. The remaining 98% is found in oceans, which is salt water and not suitable for our uses. Admittedly, the water cycle eventually returns water to Earth, yet it's not always returned to the same spot, or in the same quantity and quality. Failing to conserve water can eventually lead to a lack of an adequate, healthy water supply, which can have drastic consequences in rising costs, reduced food supplies, health hazards and political conflict.

  嗯,那当然不是事实。就算他们有钱,也给了权利去任意使用淡水,他们也应该努力节约使用淡水,因为淡水与其他自然资源一样,实际上都是有限的。正如科学家告诉我们的那样,虽然地球有很多水域,但淡水不足地球所有水量的2%,这的确是很小的一部分。剩下的98%在海洋中,是咸水,不适合使用。诚然,水循环最终会把水还给地球,但不总是还在同一个地方,或者以同样的数量和质量还回。如果不保存水,最终会导致健康淡水供应不足,这会引起剧烈的后果,如成本上升,食品供应下降,身体危害,甚至政治冲突。

  解析

  (1)本段论述淡水资源并非无穷尽,一旦资源枯竭会带来什么样的后果。本段内容比较丰富,句型词汇都相当复杂,高分段烤鸭可认真模仿。

  (2)empower 使......有权力

  (3)conserve 保护;保存

  (4)natural resources 自然资源

  (5)comprise 构成

  (6)fraction 小部分

  (7)eventually 最终

  (8)drastic 剧烈的

  (9)hazard 危害;危险

 

  03、To combat the anthropocentric claim of the unlimited right to use fresh water, we have to remember that, besides human beings, other animals and plants also need fresh water for their survival and growth. To sustain the ever-increasing population, we have already consumed tremendous amount of fresh water in agricultural irrigation, industrial production and electricity generation, not including those we drink in our daily life. It is, therefore, completely necessary for us human beings to save fresh water for other beings in the universe, on whom our own existence largely depends.

  针对那种人类中心式的认为可以无限使用淡水的说法,我们应记住:除了人类,其他动植物也需要淡水才能生存和成长。为了维持不断增长的人口数量,我们已经消耗了巨量淡水用于农业灌溉、工业生产以及发电,还不包括我们日常饮用的。因此,我们人类有必要节约淡水,只为宇宙中的其他生命,我们的生存和这些生命息息相关。

  解析

  (1) 本段写应该节约淡水使用的另一个原因,即,人类已经消耗了太多水资源,还应该考虑自然中其他动植物的生存。

  (2) combat 与......斗争

  (3) anthropocentric \ˌan(t)-thrə-pə-ˈsen-trik\人类中心主义的

  (4) sustain 供养,维持

  (5) irrigation\ˌir-ə-ˈgā-shən\ 灌溉

 

  04、So, financially and civilly, people should be allowed the power to use the fresh water the way they like, but as the fresh water resource is rather limited and the it is so vital to the survival of both humans and non-humans, I think the government should take immediate actions to control the use of fresh water.

  因此,在金钱上或者民权上,人们理应有权随意使用淡水,但是由于淡水资源相当有限,而且淡水对人类和非人类又如此重要,我认为政府应立即采取措施,控制淡水的使用。(文|唐伟胜)

 

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